I didn't know about the DD, Jessica--it's probably the most well deserved Daily Deviation I've read...ever. Nope, not sucking up--just saying what I feel at the moment. I can see this happening in my minds eye as I've had surgery of this type many times myself as several of my nieces and nephews were doctors in their youth (one turned out to be a doctor in adult life but I don't hold that against him).
Isn't it strange how a appendix can regenerate so many times? Well done, my friend!
Aww...how kind you are, John! I'm glad you liked it. I knew I had to write it...at least for posterity's sake. It will continue as a live memory, in black and white as long as anyone wants to read it. And yes, you are correct. the regenerative properties are so very very strange, lol.
So. I'm sure you noticed I've been absent. I had an "incident" last Thursday that left me in the hospital for five days. Doctors are assholes with God complexes. And I had to wait to see my personal physician to be listened to and had the correct tests run. I have shingles in my ear, which was diagnosed several days before my major malfunction. It has invaded my brain and is causing some...significant problems. I walk and talk like a stroke patient, John. I have extreme photosensitivity in my right eye and so i have...seizure like (may be in reality or a Bell's Palsay effect) condition when bright lights hit my eye. I can't drive! Ugh. I am so...frustrated. An MRI of my c-spine shows two significant problems in my C2 and C3 vertebrate. I have to see a neurosurgeon for correction, which will be a freakin' scary ass surgery. My dA friends who are also facebook friends know, but a few here might be wondering and I don't want y'all to worry too much.
Anyhoo...it is what it is for now. But I am much improved from the original onset of symptoms, which was super scary as I could barely walk or make the correct words come out of my mouth. it is so odd to see the right ones in your brain, and not be able to get them out of your mouth!! Grr.
Good! And yeah. Two surgeries. It isn't a stupid question. I was in a bit of a crisis for a bit--put up a journal even. But I deleted it later. I just--didn't want to remember that dark place. She was sick at the end of May last year.
This is such a great piece, with a lot of emotional depth.
This line is great: "Mommy is crying. It’s an emergency, someone push the button." It really captures how children see their parents as infallible and all-powerful, and what it does to them when they discover they're not.
I would take a look at this line: "There was a rare moment when all was quiet, the day before anyone realized she would have to have a second surgery. She wasn’t getting better, and I knew something was wrong--probably an abdominal infection or worse and abscess." Who is she? Is that supposed to be the narrator? For a moment I thought it was talking about Bean needing a different surgery. It seems like it should be "I", not "she"
The story would also be better ending instead with "... as she gleefully gathers her doctor supplies." The last line doesn't really contribute anything valuable to the story, you already set the tone of the piece perfectly. We already know it's a good time.
I tried very much to hide my personal turmoil from her, and trust me there was a plethora. Basically missing my older son's birthday, medical incompetence, staff issues, lack of supplies at the hospital--I had to buy my own chewable Tylenol for her and pull ups because she developed an illus of the bowel!! ...sigh...anyway, thanks so much for your articulate response in connecting there.
As for that line, you had the right of it, dear. She did have to have a second surgery due to the infection. I will look at it for tweaking pertaining to clarification, though.
It is funny with this piece...I wrote it. Period. As in, I did not draft and rewrite and revise. Post. Revise. I wrote it and posted. I never fathomed the wide audience this piece would have!! I think you picked up on the emotional depth because I love my kids very much and that was transparent throughout.
I appreciate your feedback and hope you have a wonderful, creative week!!
Ohhh my god, I read this piece entirely wrong. For some reason I read it as you having had the surgery, not her. Obviously, from the line "Why am I the only one without an appendix in our family?" But I think I was confused by "What was it like in the hospital momma?" right after that. Might just be a matter of me being an idiot, not an actual problem with the story.
It makes a little more sense why you were so scared. I thought you were just scared of getting surgery, but shit, having a kid who needs surgery... what a nightmare. So glad my little one is healthy as a horse.... so far anyway.
mmhumm It was an eight day nightmare, all around. But we are through all of that now, thank goodness, and currently dealing with her broken ARM! lol. Fell out of a tree Tuesday late afternoon. I was almost there to get her out when the branch broke. ugh. Talk about sleepless nights.
Anyway, I'm glad your little one is healthy as a horse.
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