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dark, destructive and dangerous
   drawn between her
open
unmerciful
thighs
you go-

forgetting
   any and all
longitude of thought
and
latitude of reason

to die in that moment
   bound there
(doomed to repeat)
blinded by
   and lost in
eyes
of
blue
:icondragon-fly-to-me:
(I suppose this writing shows my jaded side. Just a bit.
The structure here is a bit chaotic intentionally.)

...Tonic's "If you could only see" [link]


Seems the road less traveled
Show's happiness unraveled
And you got to take a little dirt
To keep what you love
That's what you gotta do

Sayin' you love but you don't
You give your love but you won't
You're stretching out your arms to something that's just not there
sayin you love where you stand
Give you heart when you can

If you could only see the way she loves me
Then maybe you would understand
Why I feel this way about our love
And what I must do
If you could only see how blue her eyes can be when she says
When she says she loves me
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:iconginsbergchick:
"forgetting
any and all
longitude of thought
and
latitude of reason"

Love that section in particular. You've got another winner here, lady. Very strong, raw.
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*dragon-fly-to-me Apr 1, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, Jay.
Glad you liked it.
Have a great weekend, dear.
:iconhappysunplz:
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:iconginsbergchick:
Most welcome. :-) You, too!
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*dragon-fly-to-me Apr 2, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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~Lovespoon Apr 1, 2011  Professional Writer
Excellent structure. I don't think it needs to be explained.

:thumbsup:

:teddy:
lovespoon
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*dragon-fly-to-me Apr 1, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :teddy:
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~brunette-from-oz Mar 30, 2011   General Artist
Yum! Can we have hazel eyes please? "=_
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*dragon-fly-to-me Mar 31, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
lol...:no:
I wrote this for the song! The girl has blue eyes. :hug:
Sorry, charlie.
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`FuzzyHoser Mar 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I feel the need to exhale.. :heart:

Gorgeous, Jessie. Gorgeous..
You have pretty words.
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*dragon-fly-to-me Mar 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Well...breathe, sister! :heart:

Thank you, dearie.
I'm glad you like it.
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